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More intermission text adjustments (#572)
* More intermission text adjustments I still hate that "...", but I'm starting to think the aggravation is not really that itself but the use of a direct quote for "you" the player for something they never actually said. So looking at the E4 text again to see how it could be avoided, I noticed a bunch of other little weird things... the past tense on the first sentence clashing with the rest of the present tense; the "despite" doesn't really fit with the logical progression; and while I know exactly what "plump down" was intended to convey it seems a bit nonstandard. It's also missing punctuation at the end, in contrast with the other intermission texts. Here's a somewhat significant rewrite to get around those issues. I've also made smaller changes to C5 and C6 for similar reasons. * Got rid of that column of "you"s. * Spacing.
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@ -395,18 +395,18 @@ E3TEXT = The abomination explodes into\n\
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You drop all your weapons on\n\
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You drop all your weapons on\n\
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the ground and step on the platform,\n\
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the ground and step on the platform,\n\
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reintegrating on Double Impact.
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reintegrating on Double Impact.
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E4TEXT = Despite fighting an army of monsters,\n\
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E4TEXT = After yet another army of monsters\n\
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you managed to find a ship here.\n\
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you manage to find a functioning ship.\n\
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Looks like freedom is yours.\n\n\
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Looks like freedom is yours.\n\n\
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"Time to get out of here..."\n\
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You practically melt into the soft\n\
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you tell yourself and plump down\n\
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pilot's seat, a luxurious welcome\n\
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on the comfortable chair.\n\n\
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as you leave this wretched rock.\n\n\
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The ship rumbles as she wakes up.\n\
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The ship rumbles as she wakes up;\n\
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As you lift off, you think of Earth.\n\n\
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you think of Earth as she lifts off.\n\
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Hopefully, AGM won't find you there.\n\
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Hopefully, AGM won't find you there:\n\
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They've got the outbreak to deal\n\
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they've got the outbreak to deal\n\
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with, so that'll give you some time.\n\n\
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with, so that'll give you some time.\n\n\
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Destination: Earth
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Destination: Earth!
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# After MAP06, before MAP07:
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# After MAP06, before MAP07:
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C1TEXT = You've found your way to the\n\
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C1TEXT = You've found your way to the\n\
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complex's outer storage warehouse.\n\
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complex's outer storage warehouse.\n\
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C5TEXT = You step onto the machine and\n\
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C5TEXT = You step onto the machine and\n\
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after a strange flash you find\n\
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after a strange flash you find\n\
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yourself in a rusty cage.\n\n\
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yourself in a rusty cage.\n\n\
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"What is this place?"\n\n\
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What happened? Where is this?\n\n\
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Before you can wonder further,\n\
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Before you can wonder further\n\
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you see monsters all around\n\
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you notice that you are surrounded\n\
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you. It's a trap.\n\n\
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by monsters. It was a trap.\n\n\
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You silently bring out\n\
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You silently bring out\n\
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your gun, ready to kill.
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your gun, ready to kill.
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# Before MAP32 (secret level #2):
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# Before MAP32 (secret level #2):
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to find yourself inside another.\n\
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to find yourself inside another.\n\
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As the glow of the teleporter\n\
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As the glow of the teleporter\n\
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subsides, it looks like you may\n\
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subsides, it looks like you may\n\
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have made a wrong turn. Again.\n\n\
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have made a wrong turn.\n\n\
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"Not again."\n\n\
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Again.\n\n\
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The world comes back to you.\n\
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The world comes back to you.\n\
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The monsters you fought before\n\
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The monsters you fought before\n\
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raise their weapons,\n\n\
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raise their weapons,\n\n\
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