More intermission text adjustments (#572)

* More intermission text adjustments

I still hate that "...", but I'm starting to think the aggravation is not really that itself but the use of a direct quote for "you" the player for something they never actually said.

So looking at the E4 text again to see how it could be avoided, I noticed a bunch of other little weird things... the past tense on the first sentence clashing with the rest of the present tense; the "despite" doesn't really fit with the logical progression; and while I know exactly what "plump down" was intended to convey it seems a bit nonstandard. It's also missing punctuation at the end, in contrast with the other intermission texts.

Here's a somewhat significant rewrite to get around those issues.

I've also made smaller changes to C5 and C6 for similar reasons.

* Got rid of that column of "you"s.

* Spacing.
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MatthewTheGlutton 2019-07-09 02:30:51 -07:00 committed by NickZ
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@ -395,18 +395,18 @@ E3TEXT = The abomination explodes into\n\
You drop all your weapons on\n\ You drop all your weapons on\n\
the ground and step on the platform,\n\ the ground and step on the platform,\n\
reintegrating on Double Impact. reintegrating on Double Impact.
E4TEXT = Despite fighting an army of monsters,\n\ E4TEXT = After yet another army of monsters\n\
you managed to find a ship here.\n\ you manage to find a functioning ship.\n\
Looks like freedom is yours.\n\n\ Looks like freedom is yours.\n\n\
"Time to get out of here..."\n\ You practically melt into the soft\n\
you tell yourself and plump down\n\ pilot's seat, a luxurious welcome\n\
on the comfortable chair.\n\n\ as you leave this wretched rock.\n\n\
The ship rumbles as she wakes up.\n\ The ship rumbles as she wakes up;\n\
As you lift off, you think of Earth.\n\n\ you think of Earth as she lifts off.\n\
Hopefully, AGM won't find you there.\n\ Hopefully, AGM won't find you there:\n\
They've got the outbreak to deal\n\ they've got the outbreak to deal\n\
with, so that'll give you some time.\n\n\ with, so that'll give you some time.\n\n\
Destination: Earth Destination: Earth!
# After MAP06, before MAP07: # After MAP06, before MAP07:
C1TEXT = You've found your way to the\n\ C1TEXT = You've found your way to the\n\
complex's outer storage warehouse.\n\ complex's outer storage warehouse.\n\
@ -464,10 +464,10 @@ C4TEXT = The evil thing becomes unstable.\n\n\
C5TEXT = You step onto the machine and\n\ C5TEXT = You step onto the machine and\n\
after a strange flash you find\n\ after a strange flash you find\n\
yourself in a rusty cage.\n\n\ yourself in a rusty cage.\n\n\
"What is this place?"\n\n\ What happened? Where is this?\n\n\
Before you can wonder further,\n\ Before you can wonder further\n\
you see monsters all around\n\ you notice that you are surrounded\n\
you. It's a trap.\n\n\ by monsters. It was a trap.\n\n\
You silently bring out\n\ You silently bring out\n\
your gun, ready to kill. your gun, ready to kill.
# Before MAP32 (secret level #2): # Before MAP32 (secret level #2):
@ -476,8 +476,8 @@ C6TEXT = The world dissipitates around\n\
to find yourself inside another.\n\ to find yourself inside another.\n\
As the glow of the teleporter\n\ As the glow of the teleporter\n\
subsides, it looks like you may\n\ subsides, it looks like you may\n\
have made a wrong turn. Again.\n\n\ have made a wrong turn.\n\n\
"Not again."\n\n\ Again.\n\n\
The world comes back to you.\n\ The world comes back to you.\n\
The monsters you fought before\n\ The monsters you fought before\n\
raise their weapons,\n\n\ raise their weapons,\n\n\